Constructive feedback from Focus Group

• As some of my audience members may find the transitions from dark to yellow I am going to revisit this and see if a different effect is more practical. 
• Lip syncing towards the end shows a lack in timing therefore I need to revisit and change this side to the story line to make it look more professional.
• The whole body scene seems to detract the feel of the overall story line, 
• Add more angles of head shots to show different sides to her emotion, 
• Revisit the bullying scene as some of my target audience don't think that it is a serious enough subject to effect her life that much.
• Make the ending more powerful, to match the powerful words and singing.